Friday, September 28, 2007

Poetry Tips: Worth Describing

When I first started writing poems I made the same mistakes most beginning poets do. For one, I was much too wordy. Another was that I was not descriptive enough. My poems sometimes read like a play-by-play instead of using descriptive words to conjure up the imagery and feelings behind what I was saying.
So your task today is to revise a couple of poems to see which ones merely tell the reader what is happening rather than describing it. For example:

My grandmother made tea,
As she always does on Sundays,
Lifting the porcelain cups from
The cupboard and clinking
Them together onto the silver
Tray. Today we were to
Discuss the latest bit
Of juicy gossip involving
My cousin and her good-
For-nothing-boyfriend.
As always, the tea steamed
Away all guilt from gossip.

Let’s try using more imagery, and less play-by-play, shall we?

My grandmother’s delicate, long
fingers grasped the pale blue
porcelain tea cups by their stems
and, clinking, set them upon her
favored, tarnished, silver tea tray.
As was custom on Sundays, we
were to sit together steaming
about our relative (my cousin)
and her good-for-nothing
boyfriend, much like this rich
Irish Breakfast Black tea was
steaming up at us warming our
cheeks as though they weren’t
already red with anger.


Notice the differences? By expanding on the description of the small scene taking place you can interest and involve the reader much more closely. If you have some poems lying around, you may want to see if you can tweak it a little to include more descriptive imagery. Or you can create a brand new poem keeping this tactic in mind.
Thanks for stopping in. Tomorrow I will be introducing you to another poet that blogs…

6 comments:

Anonymous said...

Hello, nice poem.

Anonymous said...

NICE POEM

happy said...

Do you write songs?

Anonymous said...

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Anonymous said...

yo. nice page dude. yoyoyo. help me edit this poem.



yo yo yo
i know
that you know
that the earth is flow
but i don't know
if life is slow
or if it's just me, flo
yo yo yo

Anonymous said...

yo yo yo
it's me again
i don't know that to say
or where to begin
i know that life is hard
i know that things aren't right
but i'll help you through it
and together we will fight
yo o o o o
yo o o o o
now i'm ending this
so just sit back and relax
and now i'll teach you
how to live life to the max